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2. Still scary...
The assignment: Craft a piece of short fiction featuring the dialogue between two people arguing. Focus more on the spoken language and less on setting details. Think "Hills Like White Elephants" by Hemingway.
The result:
"I need you." It came out as a whisper. Like even my body knew it was a betrayal.
"Yep. Ineedyoutoo." A dismissal. A rush of words designed to shut me up. It is his favorite trick. Simply repeat the last thing he heard me say and, oh look at that, what a great conversation we're having.
"Did you hear me?"
"Yep. I heard you."
"Well, do you..."
"Look there's only 5 minutes left of the game. Can't we talk about this after it's over?" He's annoyed. I shouldn't have started this now. But his distance, his lack of concern, has flipped the switch and now I'm pissed.
"After the game there will be another 4 hours of the next game, then 2 hours of highlights, and another hour of random channel surfing. This is important! You can't just SAY you hear me...you have to actually listen!"
"Give me a break! Don't start your - I have a psych degree that was a total waste of money so I'm going to force my 'knowledge' on you and have some deep conversation about hearing versus listening - crap. It's all the same." His sing-song mocking does it. I actually see red. I want to cause him physical harm...my eyes unconsciously drift below his belt.
"Oh so now you're pissed and you're just going to walk away,' he yells, "that's really mature. Where the hell do you think you're going?"
"Away from you." I say, already across the room with keys in hand.
"Really? I thought you 'needed' me."
I am stunned. I am frozen in my place. I knew he could be an ass, I knew he could be thoughtless, but cruel? Never. At least not until now. The keys leave my hand as if they have a mind of their own. Headed directly for his unguarded man bits.
3. And last but not least...reading is yummy! 
Have a great weekend and if you're in this part of the world stay dry!
18 comments:
Man bits getting smashed by a heavy set of keys....I'd say he deserved it!!
Great writing and what a cute pic of little one eating books.
Have a great weekend!!!
Great short story. Keep going...
HA! Unguarded manbits! He had it coming..
Hey, visiting from NFF @ TGC! It's definitley a wet day here, too!
Sarah
http://craftingandcreativity.blogspot.com/
great story! found you on NFF :)
Hey, the story looks good. Seriously. Don't be scared. You did fine. I love it.
and your book chomping monster is cute!
Books are so yummy, aren't they?
xo Erin
It was very real. The attention to detail you had made it real. (unconsciously below his belt, the rush of words and how they were written by you) Very good!
Oooo, I'm mad at him now too!
And thank you for my daily dose of Pie :)
Well done! I want to read more of their story...I wanna know what she does AFTER she pulverizes the man-bits.
I'm glad she got him back. You go girl! I hate when men don't listen. Don't they realize that most women are high maintenance? Lol.
LOL! Loved the last sentence. Totally spit coffee all over the place. Great job.
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Great job! I was so glad she threw her keys at him. It was definitely deserved.
She is adorable! I am a new follower!! Stopping in from Follow Friday!You can find me at http://www.pegsplay.com
My 1yr is thinks reading is yummy too, just as as long as he keeps it to his hard page books and stays off my 3yr tag books.
OH. I like the dialogue. Very interesting. (And so true about the hours of games and highlights.)
that picture is too cute!! it reminds me of a book i saw recently.. the incredible book eating boy
http://www.amazon.com/gp/product/0399247491/ref=pd_lpo_k2_dp_sr_1?pf_rd_p=486539851&pf_rd_s=lpo-top-stripe-1&pf_rd_t=201&pf_rd_i=0810912457&pf_rd_m=ATVPDKIKX0DER&pf_rd_r=0EKFPEGVZQXA6W947PD4
so cute!
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